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Critiques Requested!! Anything helps : )

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Posted 06 February 2012 - 04:11 AM

Hey VO! Sorry i've not been very active lately, but im here to ask a small favor!
I've been working on a drawing for some time now, and I want a little bit of critique on it!
This piece is for a regional art contest, and I want to create the best piece I possibly can for it, so I really need other peoples opinions on how to make things better! uwu/
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The legs probably won't stay in that position, so any pose ideas would help me a lot ;w;//

thank you all!!

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Posted 06 February 2012 - 10:36 AM

holy crap that coloring.

critique you say? ok.
The left hand really needs a thumb. Looks kinda weird without even the beginning / ending of a thumb.
The legs are just fine but the feet looks just a bit broken, raising it up a bit would solve the problem. Also I would add more details to the wings to match the rest of the figure cause the human is really detailed. It's mismatching her. And a necklace to match her hair / dress roses.

Also, how do you plan doing to background? Cause if you're not too late it would be really nice making a really dark cloudy sky o3o!


I don't have much else to offer here, if you just keep doing it with love and effort I'm pretty sure you're going to win.

Hm, I came back to give a second look on this.
The eyes look a bit misplaced, I know your intention was for her to be looking down, but the way it is wirght now it's just looks like the eyes are misplaced lolo
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Posted 06 February 2012 - 11:46 PM

I think its her right eye that looks misplaced... ill try to figure out a fix to that :C Thank you

in anycase, I fixed up the colours + drew some legs. I've been trying to draw a thumb to that hand, but every time I try, it makes her hand look like a potato lmaooo
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EDIT:
Actually, I think I kinda fixed the face u__u
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Posted 07 February 2012 - 12:57 AM

her eyes are still too lowered. I tried to photoshop and explain:

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sorry xD

I took a shot of the head, cause it still has something strange about it:

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Posted 07 February 2012 - 01:22 AM

oh, I see!
That looks muuch better, ill do that oAo

Also, whats up w/ the stockings so I can fix them ;__;;;;

Thanks so much for redlining uAu

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Posted 07 February 2012 - 01:45 AM

It looks nice but the face seems a bit squished. (Then again anime faces tend to be that way) If it is for a regional competition then I would need to know more about what themes and styles they are looking for to give a decent critique. Though just from a regular persons point of view The coloring looks nice but the wing on her right looks a bit light compared to the one on her left. ( I also don't think though wings are anatomy correct either but it is a cartoon so whatever) I also think she just a pinch to much blush on her face. The roses on the dress by her hips are a nice touch. Also some feet and a background would like nice (But I am guessing you are doing that now)
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Posted 07 February 2012 - 01:49 AM

View PostLuna, on 07 February 2012 - 01:28 AM, said:

oh, I see!
That looks muuch better, ill do that oAo

Also, whats up w/ the stockings so I can fix them ;__;;;;

Thanks so much for redlining uAu



they look freaking amazinf hsjadgjdfkjkld I was just impressed so I had to comment HJSAFKJD
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Posted 07 February 2012 - 01:49 AM

Aye, yeah uwu
the competition isn't really that... there is no theme! Its basically draw what you want, with your own theme and own style, and the judges judge based on technique. uwu/

I'm gonna try to work on the colouring of the wings, since I know they're a bit underdeveloped. The one on her right is lighter because its closer to the light source, which would be our top left hand side. Ill work on her complexion, and yeah im doing the feet and stuff right now XD thank you!!

and @Mini
oh thank you thank you oAo !! I think i've fixed her facial structure, ill up a pic once I lighten up her face uwu/

thanks everyone for the help again! ;__;;; im very grateful!

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Posted 07 February 2012 - 02:15 AM

Oh wait the thumb is supposed to be tucked under the hand in Mini's picture.

My bad. Forget I was ever here.
Sorry!

The drawing looks nice though; keep it up!


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Posted 07 February 2012 - 02:34 AM

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any better???? ;o;

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Posted 07 February 2012 - 02:38 AM

yay! Good job on it! Keep going for the shoes!

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Posted 07 February 2012 - 03:07 AM

did someone say shoes
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Posted 07 February 2012 - 06:02 AM

View PostLuna, on 06 February 2012 - 08:13 PM, said:

did someone say shoes
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Ah that looks really good now. I can tell you worked on the coloring! Good job!
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Posted 07 February 2012 - 07:31 PM

I still feel there's something wrong with the face but as soon as you finish the background I quite doubt anyone is going to notice it LOL XDDD
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Posted 09 February 2012 - 05:10 AM

what is backgrounds
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