[Amagaku]

Ok, after reading a topic about how to make your UTAU more well-liked in the community, I thought it would be a good idea to make a critique topic, just fill out the form I'm making below, and users can come and critique your UTAU's appearance, personality, and voice. It's not a bash though, this is just to help people create better UTAU's, so please, feel free to critique, but be nice

the form:

Picture of your UTAU:

Name:

Age:

Height:

Weight:

Personality:

Backstory (if you have one, if you dont, leave blank):

Paired with(if none, leave blank) :

Character Item:

Video or Video's of them:

Their Voicebank:


Ok, now some rules:

-Please be polite, we don't want people being bashed, its supposed to be helpful critique.

-If you post your UTAU on here, try to critique others too, that way everyone gets help.

-Don't be afraid to give your opinion, even if others might not agree with it, we want to hear everyone's opinion.

-Please do not only critique their voice, critique both the voice AND character, so it is balanced.




Here is my UTAU, please critique her!


Picture of your UTAU:

Name: Amagaku

Age: 15

Height: 5'7"

Weight: 135 lbs

Personality: Amagaku is Sadistic, caring, sweet, she cares deeply about the person she loves, but holds a grudge against anyone else who is close to him.

Backstory (if you have one, if you dont, leave blank): Well, she used to have one, but I've decided to scrap it, for the better of the character

Paired with(if none, leave blank) : Kumai Kamine, LuciferxLafeye's male UTAU

Character Item: Taser (stun gun)

Video or Video's of them:



Their Voicebank: http://www.mediafire...php?2zmn0kwhrja

[Gwenhwyfar]

xD Meh, I'm still creating my UTAU, so I still don't have a lot of stuff for her.. I'll just help you by being one of the first to post here, lol.

Picture of your UTAU: Under construction.

Name: Valkyrie (I like it, so I'm sticking with it).

Age: 14

Height: No specific height. Err, 4'12"? *shot*

Weight: She would probably at least be at the minimum of the BMI calculator. (This tells you if you're at a healthy weight).

Personality: I like to think of her as meek and polite because that's what her image that I have in mind looks like. I also like to think she has a tiny crush on Leon and looks up to him. Obviously, her love will be unrequited because Leon would be a pedo for returning her feelings. Because I don't understand Japanese, she doesn't understand Japanese; she is studying it and failing miserably (offending some Japanese accidentally). But you can interpret her personality however you would like.... xD LOL, you'll probably need an image of her first.

Backstory (if you have one, if you dont, leave blank): xD Once upon a time, a girl made a UTAU and it became her servant. The end! *shot*

Paired with(if none, leave blank) :

Character Item: I'm flexible and would find it interesting if people decided on her item later (if there are people that like her). I like to think of her item as the pillow because I like to sleep. xD Sometimes I thought of making the wisdom tooth her item because when I got rid of my wisdom teeth was close to the time I started working on her.

Video or Video's of them: None yet...

Their Voicebank: Here's a sample of her voice.. Clicky!

[Aline]

Amagaku is nice enough to me <3 Must DL her when I stop being so lazy and Alzheimer-ish XD

Picture of your UTAU: 1 2 (sorry, no official art)

Name: Aline Enbukyoku

Age: Eternally 17, pretends to be older (not bothering on making her aging or anything; you can do it if you want to)

Height: 155cm/5'1" (or whatever)

Weight: UNKNOWN (erm, let's leave it at "chubby" =3=)

Personality: Usually cold to those she doesn't know, but cuddly to those she likes. Can be cynical with some things, and naive to others, which make people either despise or like her. Some people may consider her bipolar or yandere (sometimes tsundere under certain circumstances), mainly those who touch taboo subjects... Or her chocolates. Can use a pretty boyish way of speaking, but is polite and doesn't swear at all. She's regarded by others as being smart, if not a bit (emotionally and mentally) unstable, which can be partially blamed in her past as a human. (You can also disregard that if you want to. IDC; I'm too lazy to update it to something smaller)

Backstory: Aline was a nerdy girl who loved to sing and published her songs on the internet under a pseudonym (Enbukyoku). One day, in a car accident, she died, but a scientist (Moritake), who was obsessed with her voice and discovered her identity, decided to revive her as a cyborg, which didn't really please either, since her voice became robotic and muffled. Her family apparently didn't want something unnatural living in their house, so they sent her away to live with the scientist, who actually lived in Japan and had to adopt her as a daughter. But since he spent so much trying to revive her, they were pretty much broken, making her career rather difficult to continue. She kept her pseudonym as her new surname and is still trying to be a famous singer, while the scientist who revived her tries to fix one of his "kids" and become a singer as well. (You can also ignore this part if you want to)

Paired with: (Whoever you want to)

Character Item: Anything chocolate, bricks

Video or Video's of them: 1 2 3

Their Voicebank: DL Updated otos

[Gwenhwyfar]

xD Hmm, well, since you're not exactly letting your character's personality and backstory to be canon, I have no problem with it, Aline.

But, if I had to start critiquing as an RPer, I would change that she could give the impression of being smart to people. Of course, you're probably not using her for RPs, so I guess you can have her however you want in your fantasy stories. .3. *shot*

[StateOfDep]

Sounds like a good idea.

I really like Amagaku's voice.
*needs to remember to DL her VB when I clean out my computer, currently lacking memory space*

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I don't really care if people go by much of this or not.
Backstories, personalities, relationships... those can be disregarded.

Picture of your UTAU:

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So, uh, I know it kinda sucks... ><"

Name: Shizu Sogone

Age: 18+, it's sorta flexible. She does tend to look and sound younger, though.

Height: Approx. 5'7"

Weight: Unknown, Average-ish...? I somehow end up drawing her on the lean side, though. No idea how it happens, it just does. ><"

Personality: As her name suggests, quiet. Somewhat shy and isolated, though. She is more rational/technical/professional acting than she is outgoing, and is hard to carry a conversation with (much to her despair). She can be a different person around a few certain people, though.

Backstory (if you have one, if you dont, leave blank): The totally random one I came up with in 30 minutes? A random blurb that really has nothing to do with UTAU but still sorta shows how she became an UTAU. It's irrelevant, if you need something to kill time, go ahead. Ignore it if you want. Here: http://stateofdep.de...llery/#/d2sk46n

Paired with(if none, leave blank) : Supposedly a guy named Taer (when appearing older than 21), but since he's not an UTAU... it doesn't make much of a difference. Please ignore this.

Character Item: Five petaled, purple, flower. (A purple version of my icon, essentially)

Video or Video's of them:

Spoiler

<-without flags, 5.o vB
<-her only form of an Append, g+5 flag
<-may be slightly out of sync, but she sounds better with this song. This is her 4.1 VB, though. It was English-pronounced... :v

Their Voicebank: http://www.mediafire.com/?akizzeginzt is the most current, but only has Japanese. 4.1 on the listings here has more, but parts of it can't be used on some computers.

[Kiibei]

Picture of your UTAU:

Spoiler

Old picture is oooooooooold.

Name: Kii Nane

Age: 12-13

Height: 124cm

Weight: 30-40kg

Personality: Hyperactive, naive but stubborn at times.

Backstory: N/A

Paired with: N/A

Character Item: Potato

Video or Video's of them: Old video is ooooold.

Their Voicebank: It's definitely not heeeere xD

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I think I'm doing this because Kii's first birthday is in a few days OTL I've always wanted to know what people really thought about her.

[Gwenhwyfar]

xD Oh! I should have pointed this out, but I just noticed.

Aline and Depp, the only thing that I could probably point out is that the clothes are just a tiny bit unoriginal because they kind of take some of the themes of Miku's outfit (sleeves, hair tie, and shirt, etc).

Depp, I don't know, but some people think that the "shy and nice" personality is a bit unoriginal. I don't really think so, but I don't know. I think I've seen yandere personalities pop up more in UTAUs though...

Edit:

Tsumanne, I'm really liking your UTAU's picture. It's so unique. :3

Oh yeah, another thing I should point out is that several of you guys are giving your UTAUs Japanese names. ; They don't need to have Japanese names, ya know. They can have Engloid names...

[Aline]

Gwenefar, on 30 June 2010 - 12:39 AM, said:

xD Hmm, well, since you're not exactly letting your character's personality and backstory to be canon, I have no problem with it, Aline.

But, if I had to start critiquing as an RPer, I would change that she could give the impression of being smart to people. Of course, you're probably not using her for RPs, so I guess you can have her however you want in your fantasy stories. .3. *shot*

Thank you for the tip, I knew something was ticking me off and I couldn't pinpoint what. Also, I avoid stating it as canon exactly because I don't want to restrict people; I've seen many good VBs being thrown aside by other users because of strict canon/rules, and would love if people were more loose with that stuff =w=

[chantell]

well i would post Midori but ppl probably wont like her cuz her voice bank was recored using my mom's cell phone hehe so yeah i am kinda scraded that every one ir just going to hate her voice and that fact that i made her with alot of orange and blue and i didnt want to use black cuz ever one uses either black or white so i know ppl will not really like her

but i think Amangaku has a very pretty voice its not too high pitched and there is somthing about her that just makes me like her even though she is only the colors i hate ^^; and i really cant find anything about her that i think you could actually fix sorry im not the best at crit.

[Gwenhwyfar]

xD Yeah, not everyone has the same impression of someone being smart.

For example: There was a list of famous people and their IQs were recorded. Leonardo Da Vinci was recorded to be the second smartest famous person in the world (with an IQ of 220). He was only beaten by a famous female author who was reported to have an IQ of 221 or something around that.

Einstein was recorded to have only an IQ of 180 (though, it seems I might have made a mistake, since some sites say 160).

Some may argue that Einstein had a higher IQ than Leonardo, but others will think Leonardo is smarter.

xD I would have to say that Leonardo is smarter than Einstein. I know my brother and a friend argue against that.

Edit:

@Chantell: o.o; I plan to make my UTAU have orange hair because I don't see that a lot...

[StateOfDep]

Gwenefar, on 30 June 2010 - 03:57 AM, said:

Aline and Depp, the only thing that I could probably point out is that the clothes are just a tiny bit unoriginal because they kind of take some of the themes of Miku's outfit (sleeves, hair tie, and shirt, etc).

Depp, I don't know, but some people think that the "shy and nice" personality is a bit unoriginal. I don't really think so, but I don't know. I think I've seen yandere personalities pop up more in UTAUs though...

Ah, I noticed it too. Shizu's design...it's getting another one sometime soon, just an alternate, though. Sleeves = I can't/couldn't draw arms to save my life. Her shirt was supposed to be closer to Dell's than to Miku's, though. *will attempt to avoid this with her alternate design*
Err, personality wise, I don't know how, but somehow I turned Shizu that way. Her personality is like an extreme version of my own...or something like that. *has lost all ideas of where her personality came from, stories, OCs, me, idk* Her personality is something that can be disregarded unless I myself am writing it. :v
Thanks, though.

@chantell: Saw Midori's boxart a while ago, I really like her design. ^^

[Gwenhwyfar]

xD LOL! Nobody critiqued my UTAU.. Probably because I need a picture... *shot*

[NovaGirl111]

pic: http://novagirl111.d...llery/#/d2is3fk
I tried to keep it simple.(Can't draw)

Name: Rei Yurene

Age: 13 or 16(depends)

Height: 5'6"

Weight: 125 lbs (I think)

Personality: He likes to play around(like play jokes). He's sometimes a cold jerk, but doesn't mean to be. He's kind most of the time and will usually help out those that need it.

Paired with: He has a crush on Reini Amene (if that counts)

Character Item: None yet(Still thinking on it)

video(most current):

Alt. voice(separate voicebank, unreleased, it's like an append. He can't handle genderbends XD):

Voicebank: in my siggy. His current one is not released yet. I'm still working on it. I fixed his r's a bit except for re. I want him to be able to say his name correctly. XD I need to know what else to fix. He was my first finished UTAU, but I may rerecord him completely.

[Gwenhwyfar]

o.o; If you want, I can draw some chibis for you. xD

[Miku]

Er...I'll post mine, I do know her voice isn't that good for a BETA UTAUloid D:
As for her design don't complain about it...
I left it like this cause I know that the UTAU group I did was actually FOR it...

Spoiler

Picture of your UTAU:

Spoiler

http://i396.photobuc...ytelly/aika.png

Name: Aika Heion

Age: 14 (Technically she doesn't have a real age since this is only by her looks)

Height: 135 cm (4"5" feet)

Weight: 33kg (73 lbs)

Personality: I didn't bother giving her one...

Backstory (if you have one, if you dont, leave blank):

Paired with(if none, leave blank) :

Character Item: None

Video or Video's of them: BETA Sample ACT 1 Sample

Their Voicebank: BETA Voicebank