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UTAU critique - Get your UTAU critiqued here! a place for people to see what other's think of their UTAU.

#16 User is offline   Gwenhwyfar Icon

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Posted 30 June 2010 - 05:07 AM

xD Why does almost everyone feel the need to give their UTAU a Japanese name?

Anyway, I like her design. Though, the school girl outfit seems kind of typical..

I like her voice. Sounds very mature.
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Posted 30 June 2010 - 05:15 AM

View PostGwenefar, on 30 June 2010 - 03:07 PM, said:

xD Why does almost everyone feel the need to give their UTAU a Japanese name?

Anyway, I like her design. Though, the school girl outfit seems kind of typical..

I like her voice. Sounds very mature.


Lol actually my UTAUloid doesnt know her real name so that was given due to the meaning ^^;;
and lol she's meant to be have that kinda design due to the utau group i made owo;
the design was meant to give off an idol sorta thing D:
but i guess i failed with it...

thank you for that though ^^;
I might redo her design since i want it to be unique :x
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Posted 30 June 2010 - 05:37 AM

xD Alright, good luck!
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Posted 30 June 2010 - 06:53 AM

Picture of your UTAU:Posted Image

Name: Tsukine Kuro

Age: 17

Height: 175 cm

Weight: unknow

Personality: a Baka ...

Backstory (if you have one, if you dont, leave blank): One day he meet a blackcat then ... nothing ...

Paired with(if none, leave blank) :

Character Item: Black cat

Video or Video's of them:
http://www.youtube.com/v/ZRxOJSkWmho
http://www.youtube.c...h?v=KHFIILIQ6ig
Their Voicebank: http://www.mediafire.com/?wyowzjy5w1d

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Posted 30 June 2010 - 11:35 AM

I thought I'd do this with Yuki. ^^

Picture of your UTAU:
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Name:
Mahou Yuki
Please don't go complain about her Japanese name. >8| I made her up when the only non-Japanese UTAU I knew was Zanda since it was early 2009 and back then it wasn't a problem. Besides, my other UTAUs (yes, I voiced more) have names that are Egyptian and English. I tried to think up a different name for her, but I couldn't make one up that I found fitting.

Age:
19

Height:
175cm

Weight:
Undetermined
(I love to joke that she's heavy because she's a robot, but I don't see weight as important and thus I don't focus on it.)

Personality:
Cheerful, insecure, shy, loving, caring
Yuki is in general a warm person, but she's also insecure and has has a slight fear of strangers.

Backstory (if you have one, if you dont, leave blank):
It's more of a concept than a backstory, but it's just something I made for myself. I'm not really putting it online here because I don't think it's all that important and I'd rather have people make up stories for her rather than me dictating where she comes from and what her life is like.

Paired with(if none, leave blank):
She has an official crush on Takoe Zuii, but I don't mind any pairings with other UTAUs as long as they are female.

Character Item:
Ace of Spades card, motorcycle (I have the latter drawn somewhere, but it's not uploaded to the internet)

Video or Video's of them:

Faista:


Rolling Girl (ft. Yokune Ruko):


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Posted 30 June 2010 - 11:55 AM

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Name: Arisu Doson

Age: 17

Height: 5"9

Weight: 10 stone

Personality: cute and clumsy,falls over in her skates alot but refuses to take them off

Backstory:she's a want to be singer and actress so this is her big break

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Character Item: rollar skates,oreo mikshake and an ipod

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Posted 30 June 2010 - 12:20 PM

Response to Yuki: Well, there goes putting Yuki in a chorus for Cendrillon where she sings with Zanda. *shot*

I think people would complain about Yume having a Japanese name and her design being too "Vocaloid-y". D:
But I purposely designed her and Yoshiya so their outfits were like Rin and Len's...

Ah, what the heck.

Picture of your UTAU:
http://images1.wikia...YumeYoshiya.png ((With Yoshiya, her twin brother/genderbend.))

Name:
Yume Barauta
Please don't "D:" about her Japanese name...

Age:
15 ((Appearance wise))
136 ((Based on her actual birthday.))

Height:
155 cm

Weight:
96 lbs

Personality:
*copypaste from UTAU Wiki*
Yume's hyperactive and optimistic. She claims to be an ESP'er, or a person with psychic powers, though she gives no proof of this, saying that she'd suffer consequences if she did. She is extremely sugar dependent and will get depressed if she hasn't had anything sweet in a few hours. She's a fan of shounen-ai and BL doujins. She has quite the crush on Ritsu Namine, who's her frequent singing partner.
Truthfully, she's a Shinigami, but is not allowed to tell anyone, which is where the concept of being an ESP'er came from so she has something to fall back on if she ever has to do something physically impossible in public.

Backstory (if you have one, if you dont, leave blank):
She and her brother are Shinigami, and were born in 1874. Since becoming Shinigami they lived in various countries, taking on different names to match where they lived. (For example: They spent about 50 years in England under the names Holly and James Hunter. o3o) When they came back to Japan in January of 2010, they were singing in a cafe to make money for keeping up a "human" life, and were spotted by a semi-professional singer who recommended them to a studio. The first modern singers they saw were the Kagamine twins and now idolize them, which is why their outfits purposely look somewhat similar.

Paired with(if none, leave blank):
Yume is head-over-heels in love with Ritsu Namine, but she can be paired with whoever the heck you want, male or female.

Character Item:
Her light purple cellphone, because she's obsessed with texting people.

Video or Video's of them:
http://www.youtube.c...h?v=7G9MYfRjrrY
http://www.youtube.c...h?v=u0jHZYZikB4
http://www.youtube.c...h?v=QMhbkmY7_PA

Their Voicebank:
http://www.4shared.c..._Yume_ACT1.html

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Posted 30 June 2010 - 12:35 PM

View PostStateOfDep, on 29 June 2010 - 08:42 PM, said:


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I don't really care if people go by much of this or not.
Backstories, personalities, relationships... those can be disregarded.

Picture of your UTAU:
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Please ignore this.

Character Item: Five petaled, purple, flower. (A purple version of my icon, essentially)

Video or Video's of them:
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Their Voicebank: http://www.mediafire.com/?akizzeginzt is the most current, but only has Japanese. 4.1 on the listings here has more, but parts of it can't be used on some computers.

Ok, the only problem I have is she looks WAAAYY to much like Haku (although I bet you were probably going for that) But her voice is great, I really like it!


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View Postchantell, on 29 June 2010 - 09:12 PM, said:

well i would post Midori but ppl probably wont like her cuz her voice bank was recored using my mom's cell phone hehe so yeah i am kinda scraded that every one ir just going to hate her voice and that fact that i made her with alot of orange and blue and i didnt want to use black cuz ever one uses either black or white so i know ppl will not really like her

but i think Amangaku has a very pretty voice its not too high pitched and there is somthing about her that just makes me like her even though she is only the colors i hate ^^; and i really cant find anything about her that i think you could actually fix sorry im not the best at crit.

Its ok, you can still post her! Just say 'she isnt well recorded, so please only critique her character, not her voice atm" so people know she isnt ready for voice critique yet ^_^


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View PostYume Barauta, on 30 June 2010 - 05:20 AM, said:

Response to Yuki: Well, there goes putting Yuki in a chorus for Cendrillon where she sings with Zanda. *shot*

I think people would complain about Yume having a Japanese name and her design being too "Vocaloid-y". D:
But I purposely designed her and Yoshiya so their outfits were like Rin and Len's...

Ah, what the heck.

Picture of your UTAU:
http://images1.wikia...YumeYoshiya.png ((With Yoshiya, her twin brother/genderbend.))

Name:
Yume Barauta
Please don't "D:" about her Japanese name...

Age:
15 ((Appearance wise))
136 ((Based on her actual birthday.))

Height:
155 cm

Weight:
96 lbs

Personality:
*copypaste from UTAU Wiki*
Yume's hyperactive and optimistic. She claims to be an ESP'er, or a person with psychic powers, though she gives no proof of this, saying that she'd suffer consequences if she did. She is extremely sugar dependent and will get depressed if she hasn't had anything sweet in a few hours. She's a fan of shounen-ai and BL doujins. She has quite the crush on Ritsu Namine, who's her frequent singing partner.
Truthfully, she's a Shinigami, but is not allowed to tell anyone, which is where the concept of being an ESP'er came from so she has something to fall back on if she ever has to do something physically impossible in public.

Backstory (if you have one, if you dont, leave blank):
She and her brother are Shinigami, and were born in 1874. Since becoming Shinigami they lived in various countries, taking on different names to match where they lived. (For example: They spent about 50 years in England under the names Holly and James Hunter. o3o) When they came back to Japan in January of 2010, they were singing in a cafe to make money for keeping up a "human" life, and were spotted by a semi-professional singer who recommended them to a studio. The first modern singers they saw were the Kagamine twins and now idolize them, which is why their outfits purposely look somewhat similar.

Paired with(if none, leave blank):
Yume is head-over-heels in love with Ritsu Namine, but she can be paired with whoever the heck you want, male or female.

Character Item:
Her light purple cellphone, because she's obsessed with texting people.

Video or Video's of them:
http://www.youtube.c...h?v=7G9MYfRjrrY
http://www.youtube.c...h?v=u0jHZYZikB4
http://www.youtube.c...h?v=QMhbkmY7_PA

Their Voicebank:
http://www.4shared.c..._Yume_ACT1.html



Well, i'm kind of against the whole "worship the kagamine" thing, but thats probably because I just hate len fangirls XDDD Also, they do look too much like the kagamine's, even if you do want them to really like them. My UTAU absolutely IDOLIZES Meiko, but does her outfit look anything like her? nope :P So I would maybe try to add a little pazazz to their appearance, even if you want them to like the kagamine's, maybe choosing a school themed outfit, but not the same as their's would be better? It would show they still want to be like them, but they have their own style too.

Maybe something like this for the girl? (just as an example)
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This post has been edited by Alexander-After: 01 July 2010 - 06:43 PM
Reason for edit: Triple posting...

What's with all the Ama-Drama?

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Posted 30 June 2010 - 12:51 PM

@Yume Barauta:

Well, I think her voice is nice, but it sounds just a little too breathy for my personal taste. Have you tried playing with breath and other UTAU settings when making her sing?

As for the design: No offence meant, but to me the art is a turn off. I don't mind the colour schemes, but clothes and pose are so blatantly based off of Rin and Len that it makes me lose interest in them right away. I personally prefer UTAUs drawn in non-Vocaloid poses and not with the obvious KEI style referencing. I don't mind KEI style references, but it's a bit too similar for me right now.

I actually quite liked her personality, until the hidden identity thing peeked around the corner. An UTAU claiming to be an ESP-er sounds really fun to me (especially when used as comedy relief), but making her a shinigami in disguise eliminates those bonus points. I'm also not too hot about them copying the Kagamines because they idolize them - a lot of professional singers don't do this. (Beyoncé doesn't copy Lady Gaga, just to give an example. Not counting Videophone and Telephone because those are duets.) Though I -DO- like that you don't call the producer a professional.



Personally I AM guilty of having KEI inspired UTAUs, but while Yuki started off as a pretty obvious Miku reference (though with shorter boots, thigh highs, fingerless gloves instead of sleeves, a chain instead of the triangle bands and shorts instead of a skirt), she did evolve into an UTAU that looks way less similar than before.



Also, on a sidenote:

View PostYume Barauta, on 30 June 2010 - 02:20 PM, said:

Response to Yuki: Well, there goes putting Yuki in a chorus for Cendrillon where she sings with Zanda. *shot*


Yeah, sorry about that. I just really don't like that the only pairings I see are either yaoi or straight. I don't mind straight and yaoi has me interested, but seriously, where is the love for girlxgirl? D: *likes about all orientations* The only thing I sometimes see are girlxgirl Magnet covers, but other songs? Hardly ever. (I mean LOVE duets here, not friendship.)

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Posted 30 June 2010 - 12:59 PM

Hey y'all, k.e. the lurker is here nao |orz

Picture of your UTAU: Posted Image

Name: Phoenix Honoone (炎音フィニークス)

Age: 17

Height: 130cm (4'11")

Weight: 43kg (95lb)

Personality: Quiet, shy, kind, oblivious.

Backstory (if you have one, if you dont, leave blank): He did, but it's not really important o3o

Paired with(if none, leave blank) : himself? I dunno, also doesn't matter -3-

Character Item: Key

Video or Video's of them:




Their Voicebank: http://www.4shared.c.../98_online.html


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Posted 30 June 2010 - 01:07 PM

Picture of your UTAU:http://i610.photobucket.com/albums/tt188/Melodynight/IMGfincopy.jpg

Name: Mai Furuutone (True love of the flute's sound. Was originally 'dance to the flute's sound' but I got the kanji mixed up badly ^^; ))

Age: As of tomorrow she'll be 16, but she's 15 right now

Height: 5'5''-ish

Weight: 120lb

Personality: Mai-chan is what I call the lovable idiot. She's bright and pretty well-rounded, but extremely clueless at times. If you destroy a toaster pastrie, she'll snap into 'Yami Mai' (Which is kinda a play on surnames since 2 of her 'family' have the surname 'yami'). Yami Mai will beat you up.

Backstory (if you have one, if you dont, leave blank): I never really thought about it. Mai-chan lives in a 2 story apartment with her fellow 'Original Family' Crystalic UTAUs

Paired with(if none, leave blank) : I pair Mai-chan with, like, everyone who she lives with, so none of it is canon. But my faaaavorite pairings are her and her brother Masaru, and her and Kiyoshi Sankakukaine. Since I'm not very familiar with too many other UTAU users, I've never paired her up with any others. Feel free to do so, though.

Character Item: Toaster Pastries, like a Pop-Tart

Video or Video's of them: http://www.youtube.c...h?v=bZwum8S9apY is the only one with both her new design and voicebank.

Their Voicebank:http://www.mediafire.com/?zzttyhmnmm1


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Posted 30 June 2010 - 01:14 PM

@Melody

Overall, your UTAU looks pretty cute^^ But I don't really think that the color of the sleeves work with the rest of the outfit. Maybe change it up a bit? Since her name is about the sound of a flute, maybe give her a more sheer, "floating" kind of look?

And regarding her voice; it's very nice and pleasant to listen to. However, some sounds are muffled while others are mispronounced. (ex. 'shi' is pronounced like 'ji') And her oto might need to be fixed up a bit^^


Well, good luck with her! Each and every UTAU requires a lot of work, and dedication, so I hope you're not a procrastinator like me! OTL

Speaking of it, I should be re-recording some sounds for my UTAU....
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Posted 30 June 2010 - 01:20 PM

To Amagaku and Aërendyll:

Thank you for the opinions~ 8D

I'll probably change their outfits around because I see where you're coming from with them looking too much like the Kagamines.
Also I love the second school uniform that Amagaku posted. <3 ((...Also, I kinda want to give Yoshiya glasses. Do not know why.))

The hidden identity thing... I suppose it's a bit cliche but that's the one part of their backstory I do not want to change. ;;

Their idolization of the Kagamines is solely because of the fact that, after being out of Japan for a really really long time, the first modern Japanese music they were introduced to was a song by the Kagamines. And neither of them crush on Len so it's all good here. *bricked*

...I really like KEI style. And not just because of the Vocaloids, I honestly just love his art. It's also the style I'm best at doing on the computer, and since I am without a scanner at the moment... I'll remedy the obvious-copy-of-twins-pose-is-obvious though.

But yeah, thank you both for your comments and I'll try my best to take them to heart. <3

To Aërendyll:

I like yaoi and all but I have to agree that there aren't enough girl/girl pairings in the UTAU world.
I'm not that much of a fan of yuri and all, but there are countless gay male UTAUs (basically any that are voiced by girls ;; ) and, now that I know Yuki, a whopping TWO lesbian female UTAUs.
Yume and Yoshiya are officially "bisexual" but it's because they have no conscience of the whole sexuality thing.

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Posted 30 June 2010 - 01:33 PM

View Postk.e., on 30 June 2010 - 09:14 AM, said:

@Melody

Overall, your UTAU looks pretty cute^^ But I don't really think that the color of the sleeves work with the rest of the outfit. Maybe change it up a bit? Since her name is about the sound of a flute, maybe give her a more sheer, "floating" kind of look?

And regarding her voice; it's very nice and pleasant to listen to. However, some sounds are muffled while others are mispronounced. (ex. 'shi' is pronounced like 'ji') And her oto might need to be fixed up a bit^^


Well, good luck with her! Each and every UTAU requires a lot of work, and dedication, so I hope you're not a procrastinator like me! OTL

Speaking of it, I should be re-recording some sounds for my UTAU....


I think it's mostly because some of the OTOs need to be fixed, and that's the reason why she sounds like she's stumbling, or some syllables sound mispronounced.

I don't know if I'm willing to change her again, as she is already in groups and stuff, but if I do, I'll change her arm warmers to black. I can also give a little let in the skirt part and make it seem a bit floatier, and change some opacity here and there.

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Posted 30 June 2010 - 02:25 PM

I recommend you critique Dokune / me harshly. Don't be afraid of hurting my feelings - you'll help my improvement.

Picture of your UTAU:
http://skeyi.deviant...872207?q=1&qo=1

Name: Kagamibi Dokune

Age: 16

Height: 5'4"

Weight: 110 lbs

Personality: Quiet and uncaring, but not cruelly so. Prefers to work by herself and get to popularity through her own accomplishments. Dokune tries her best to sing like her senior UTAUloids. Her voice is best suited for mid to slightly low songs.

Backstory (if you have one, if you dont, leave blank):

Paired with(if none, leave blank) :

Character Item: Pills (usually poisons)

Video or Video's of them: http://www.youtube.com/user/utauDOKUNE

Their Voicebank:
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